[From Writing Excuse 10.3: Lovecraftian Horror - Link]
Hmm...the instructions were a bit unclear for me, does this mean that I shouldn't describe it at all, not mentioning smells or sensations that relate to the thing? Should everything be internal for the character? If I want to mention the character to vomit because of the stench, does that count as describing the thing? So many questions...
For this one I think I will allow myself to indirectly describe the thing, the character reacts in a certain way because of the things certain traits. I guess I could tease the reader with some vague descriptions.
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Senan couldn't believe what's happening before him. He convulsed into a pile while emptying his stomach, an attempt from his body trying to reject the whole thing.
The young man gasped for air and crawled with difficulty away from the scene, squeezing himself to the floor intent to become one with it.
His eyes would occasionally dart back and then snap to the front, focusing on the cold hard ground, the wooden door, the desk. Anything that wasn't...that.
"Don't notice. Don't notice. Don't notice." Senan silently whispered the mantra to himself.
During middle-school he would repeatedly chant "Don't hurt me." when crowded by the bullies, it took some time but after a while, the pain would stop. Maybe the same thing would happen here.
Too close to the ground can be unhealthy, especially a dusty floor like the one Senan was crawling through. His coughs echoed through the room and his pale blue eyes widened in fear. He covered his coughing mouth quickly with a bony hand and held his breath, listening for any sound behind him while shutting his eyes to enhance his ears effect.
Nothing.
Breathing out slowly he continued to crawl towards the door and opened his eyes, only to see the thing looking down on him.
There was no escape. Tears formed in Senans eyes and only one sentence quivered out from his trembling mouth.
"Don't hurt me."
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